Mum's the word

Gold cherry

By Deliberately Evolving

Sun, 19 Mar 2017
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Mum's the word: link to video: https://youtu.be/WNecLVVwU-U

 
Word paused
on sullen mouth,
one determined drop
stubbornly gripping on,
 
waits
to fall from leaky tap,
not broken enough
to bother to fix.
 
A glum tear of melancholy
sulking on crusted rim.
It's going to fall...
I can't wipe clean.
 
I wait...
wait for something...
or someone.
Desire to Shout?
 
Overwhelming urge
to call out 
absurd,
yearning delusion
 
wells up behind the drip.
Drip drop, then what?
Looks of pity
mad woman,
 
yelling for mother
in the middle of a shop 
instead
walk out
 
head drooped,
drop falls from broken lip.
Unheard, the word...
"Mum?"

 

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Comments

Submitted by celticman on

It's the one word that can make grown men cry. 

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Me too

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Ed Crane on

I feel yours. 

I hope in time Bee will become a happy memory and not the hole in your life she is now.

x

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Yes I'm sorry - can't seem to write about anything else. Every time I'm givens new theme, my writing twists itself round again. Every word and thought bending like a flower towards the sun. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

The short sharp works really well, and I imagine it sounds very effective too.

When you miss someone and it's all you can write, is something I think many of us can identify with.

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Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thanks insert. It does feel good to read out loud. The words feel like they skip well from one to another. I was pleased with it. The name calling out thing has been on my mind awhile, like maybe she is just round the corner.

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The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by love_writing on

So touching, poignant - has me welling up. It can be hard to put our emotions into words and you have done so here with such grace.

love_writing

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Thank you LC. I appreciate your comment. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Ed Crane on

 

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

Beautiful.  Mum is indeed the word.  This is very special.

Submitted by hudsonmoon on

This is so beautiful. Made me teary. I love when words make me feel something.

Rich x

 

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Yes, the pain. Not sure it goes. Just hides. You've captured nicely how it can unexpectedly manifest itself.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Denzella on

This is just beautiful.  It's as if your Mother is still expressing herself through you.  I have called out in the night for my Derek but he has gone ahead so I must try to make a life for myself until I am with him again.  The pain never goes but like the pain of arthritis, one learns to live with it. Keep writing your Mum would be so proud.

Moya