half worn

Gold cherry

By adld

Fri, 18 Jul 2014
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6 comments
 
a half worn day
tried for colour, size,
embraced, discarded,
scattered by windows
nothing fits. The body
once again declined
to take the shape prescribed
by gym , hot yoga, schemes
of intakes undertaken.
but in this unwanted form
you seem ebullient, happy -
why change? - 
 
in half drunk bars,
surrounded by approximations
of some desire
(the universal image
glimpsed, with companions
who might balk at excess,
seek a narrow mean - 
not wait for acquaintance
with every crevice,
mound, want more)
redundant here,
and now
where everythings
constricing, overlarge..
 
or say a melody half scored
complete in incompleteness -
just choruses and high notes -
dead ends and broken edges
make the whole.
shapes shift, resize,
you move with grace
while time ticks,
is this your home?
you hurry for a train
 
Certificate 15
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by scratch on

Really excellent.  So, so good.  Kudos.

 

Submitted by Hydra on

Thats my like by the way. Didn't see much point in adding a comment

 

Submitted by adld on

thankyou both very verymuch,  and fot the pick. I wasn't  at all sure if this worked as it came from two things started separately then mashed together - still want to change stuff  but will hold off for a bit

adld

Submitted by VeraClark on

Adld, this is the kind of shattering poem that you want to make people read, people everywhere, it's bold and persuasive and devastating.

 

Submitted by adld on

Vera - something very odd is happening on my page - i seem to be getting the harrowing poem To Kill a Child' ascribed to me. I assume your comment was about that poem and should be sent to Kilb50 who richly deserves this feedback,

adld

adld

Submitted by scratch on

Ah, I see,  this explains my comment to kilb50...  Thanks adld.