A Little Biit Less

Cherry

By Bee

Thu, 01 Oct 2015
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19 comments
 

Will you want to touch me,

or will you love me a little less

when my lonely bosom sadly droops 

beside a gaping gash?



Will I lay close by your side at night,

while you do your very best

to avoid the familiar place of your hand

in the space of my missing breast?



Will you say what's on your mind, 

even when your mind has strayed,

somewhere nearer perfection

and the girl of your wedding day?



Or will you want to close your eyes

and sorry, turn away

as I ask you if you love me,

and you don't know what to say?



The answer to each question

is anybody's guess,

but me, I'll be as I was before,

if just a little less. 

 

Certificate 12
Poem
Surreal
Romance
Humour
Love
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

You are taking us right in to each painful thought and experience, aren't you. No, I guess we can't be taken to each. But this is amazingly forthright. What came to my mind is that our 'outward man/woman' is perishing gradually for all of us, and physically we aren't what we were. So, the importance of the inner self, and for husbands and wives to appreciate that. But some big changes must be so poignant to handle. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Rhiannon. You do put things into perspective. 

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

For all its humour and light rhyming scheme, this speaks of anxiety, loss and fear in a way that reaches people deeply. Rhiannon is right - straight to the heart of the matter and boldly speaking with enormous depth.

Title typo!

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Vera.

All these things come to mind. The typo was deliberate - thought it looked a bit like titties. And was a little bit more, rather than less. But I'll change it if you think it doesn't work. smiley

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for the cherries. 

Bee

Submitted by VeraClark on

God, I'm not very on the ball today, am I. Got you - very crafty. Ignore me, am a plonker.

 

Submitted by Bee on

It's really not you, Vera, it me just trying to be a bit gimmicky, but ending up silly. 

x

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

a little less is a little more, no one is keeping score, but perhaps some day the weight of evidence will point your way. 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Let's hope so. Thanks CM.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Another painfully honest and heart felt piece about your journey with cancer.  You certainly paint a clear image.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for reading it, Jean. 

Bee

Submitted by Mark Say on

Simple words, but powerful emotions.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Mark,

Bee

Submitted by Shannan on

... all these poems are proving you are so much more :-)

 

Submitted by Bee on

That's really kind. Thanks Shannan.

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Bee,

This is so painfully honest.  I salute you.

Moya x

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

I don't think anyone's ever done that before.

Thanks Moya.

x

Bee

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

This is really good. So well written

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks AE.

Bee