Wings of Silence

Oh! Bee,

you say so much in this poem. When we're young we never think of growing old, or pain, it all seems like a million miles away, and yet time flies and with it so do we. Suddenly we realise that memories we shared and things we did together over the years, are there to cling onto and smile.

Many thanks for sharing your poem, it meant a lot to me, as I'm sure it will to other readers.

Take care of yourself.

Jenny.

This is so sad. I found the days of lonely hunger line very true. x

Bear is spot on when he says that nothing is forced. So easy to fall into that trap with rhyme. But not here. The second stanza that ends with "agitated sand" is stunning. This is a stand out poem for many reasons Bee. Loved it.

Lovely poem. It has simplicity but with real depth and meaning. A great balance to find. 

Dreams of youth can vitalise, but all have to accept that many prove unrealistic, or we fail our own goals. I was intrigued by And we never even noticed a world where others stand  which seemed to indicate how it sometimes is good involvement with others' needs that can derail some of our plans and dreams.

It's the days of lonely hunger that fill the heart with pain when the weary grow no younger where's the strength to try again? very well put. But for the answer, you know what I would say, but also, I think when we are older maybe we need to also pray that guidance for what plans and desires we should have now, and then strength to attempt and persevere with them, or as much as we manage of them.
It is interesting to see you working on such a rhyming scheme.

Rhiannon

HI Bee

Lovely new picture of you on your page.

You put your heart and soul into this poem.

Jean

Such a pity how such beauty can convey so much sadness.

Ed x

sad and uplifting, a rare combination, and perhaps that rare resonance of the best poets of the grit and grain of pearl-like truth. Perhaps the only thing I'd dare change would be hope [singular] to hopes [plural] even though one is contained in the other. 

I don't have any problem with being wrong. It's a default position. We can agree it's a beutiful poem that shines. And what you or I think is left best to the creator. The fact you've taken time to ponder bear-like shows a mangaminity that is much to be admired.   

if there is such a thing as a simple poem I've not found it. This is superb. In my limited opinon, one of your best. 

Ooh Ha Bee,

What a tadoo.  I don't know anything about the rights and wrongs of poetry but I know what I like and this is one of them.  I think it is both a beautiful expression of love and loss, for example

' It's the days of lonely hunger
that fill the heart with pain'

Your poetry is so accessible, if I could, I would read  every word you have ever written.

Moya

How could I have missed this, Bee. Being a rhymed poem it is right up my street. Thanks to Rich's rendering I can now appreciate this delicately romantic verse that never strays into cloying sentimentality. Beautiful.

Luigi x