Fire and love
By Beeme
Wed, 11 Jul 2012
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It is the look
in the passengers eyes
just before the carriage explodes.
Uncontrollable shaking,
veins as bright as lighting.
Hands wrapped in pairs,
as we walk along the hospital corridor;
your hand in mine
the tremours engulfing us both.
I try to forget that our bodies are falling,
the carnage behind your eyelids.
But I can’t stop feeling
the vibrations in my bloodstream,
eager for my father to come back to life.
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New Beeme Definitely
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Beeme
Definitely heartfelt.
Says a lot.
Words stanza
Hands wrapped in pairs,
as we walk along the hospital corridor;
your hand in mine
the tremours engulfing us both
julie xx
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Hi beeme read this and this
Hi beeme read this and this encouraged me to read some more of your pieces,really outstanding work. I think you are less of an aspiring poet and more a poet! I look forward to reading more. Well deserved cherries.
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Me too - my father drank
Me too - my father drank himself to death and it's a terrible thing to see. I feel for you. That you can express it so well through your poetry is a testament to your courage and intelligence.
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powerful stuff... some
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powerful stuff... some amazing energy in this poem. favourite line "veins as bright as lighting." - just great.
ddf
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To be able to write so
To be able to write so effectively about this shows your qualities as a poet Beeme. I'm wishing you and yours all the best.
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This is absolutely amazing,
Permalink Submitted by Jessiibear on
This is absolutely amazing, Beeme. You're absolutely amazing, at what you do. :)
Read it twice. Still can't get enough.
Jess
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This is absolutely amazing,
Permalink Submitted by Jessiibear on
This is absolutely amazing, Beeme. You're absolutely amazing, at what you do. :)
Read it twice. Still can't get enough.
Jess
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I'm glad that I came along
I'm glad that I came along Beeme. There can be no doubt that this is accomplished writing. Poetic language working hard and that aligned with the depth of feeling that you have managed to pack in it makes it a tour de force.
Fabulous writing.
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Great imagery, Beeme. Really
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Great imagery, Beeme. Really enjoyed your poem. Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher
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Great imagery, Beeme. Really
Permalink Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Great imagery, Beeme. Really enjoyed your poem. Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher
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Fantastic poem, Beeme. Must
Fantastic poem, Beeme. Must catch up with more of your writing.
Rigel
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"veins as bright as
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
"veins as bright as lighting.
Hands wrapped in pairs,"
- adore these lines, Beeme. A compact poem that packs a powerful punch. Well done on the cherries!
Magic xxx
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