BANANAS ON LINE (IP) True

By Cavalcader

Sun, 30 Jan 2011
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11 comments
 

Off I go with the babe
in her pram
the bag attached is crammed

To see the shops
and buy some chops

And many other things
I pop into a jewellers
to have a peep at rings

Behind the counter
the tall stoutly man
is writing with
a Swan fountain pen

Specs hanging
on the end of his nose
big eyes looking
as if in a doze

Staring staring
at me in a an odd way
as the ink from his pen
shot all over my face

And opologises
hands me a damp cloth
so I can wipe it all off

Do you think I would
buy anything there
not on your life
I do declare

The pram is parked
by a vegetable shop
left with the brake on

But "Petal" the babe
has in her hand
the biggest reddish apple
from the box stand

She has taken a big bite
although only a tiny mite
I don't know where to put my face

So quickly passing by
a picture in a window
has caught my eye

The colours are a delight
done by broad brush strokes
of a ship on the ocean blue
I must buy it too

Then I hurry on along the roads
forgetting the bag
of yellow bananas in my load

Over the crossing line
the wheels are going
bumpety bump
with each jolt

Alarm bells are going off
to tell one not to cross
the six five special
is due on time

But my yellow bananas
have jumped out the bag
quickly I turn back
one hand on the springy high pram

Bend down and rescue them
on the track
my heart is going fast
luckily it didn't end in fate

All I wanted was to get back home
and make my banana cake.

all comments please
don't think quite right yet.

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by fatboy74 on
I like this one Julie, the only way we can get our kids around the supermarket is by giving them bread, donughts grapes etc which I suppose is technically stealing, but we always pay for it and it's better than all hell breaking loose. Thanks for the read. FB :-)

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I love the idea of the baby shoplifting the apple Julie! Also the near miss with the bananas - very dramatic! there are a couple of things: I must buy it to - too as if in a dose - doze so I can wipe it all of - off hope that helps

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new fatboy74 Thankyou for a good comment. It was all true unfortunately. And once at a supermarket then the low shelves a jar of pickles a friend helped clear up she was elderly then. Bit daft putting shelves so low.Some used to jump on the teddies honestly. Well I have juggled with this get the phrases in. Any help is great and made up the rest. Have a good week-end going finish my sleep. julie x

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new insertponceyfre Hi! Thankyou so much for pointing out the mistakes. Of which I have now corrected from you all help I appreciate. I had to think and juggle with this make it read sense. Especially broad bit. But it really happened. I scolded our daughter off not her name in kind of poem.I have to think hard.I must catch up on yours. Any help all appreciated. I am going back for a doze.Reading your stories good. Have a nice week-end. julie x

Submitted by celticman on
nicely phrased: grasped my head from start to finish.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Celticman Cor! thanks well tried late at night Bananas true and rail. Made up the rest.But good help from insertponceyfre in couple spelling mistakes. Or anyone can help.Very naughty foreward child then and apple was another time. have a good week-end.So pleased some are reading going up wow! julie x

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new SundaysChild Thankyou so much all true the apple at one time and the bananas so fixed three phrases in. Insertponceyfre helped on the correctness kindly off and of and dose and doze. I thought it quick juggled bit with it brought in the picture into it. thankyou for commenting on it.Like reading yours and all other's give me inspiration and ideas have a good week.It was our daughter not that name though. I pushed the second hand pram from one town to another I bought so proud of it then they have stopped making them now.Photo of it and make in the local paper not long ago.From years back. julie x.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Julie - you have worked so hard on this one, and I'm sorry I haven't commented before, but have only just noticed it. I too make banana cake, or rather, I used to, when my kids were small. Speaking of which, you mention 'springy' prams. A thing of the past, unfortunately. 'Cross' I seem to remember, was the 'Rolls Royce' of perambulators in the fifites and sixties. Nowadays, 'buggies' are far more desirable, seeing as you can fold 'em up and put 'em in a car!! Much enjoyed your poem, Julie. Keep 'patting that butter'...You're doing fine;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New Silver-Spun-Sand That's ok not right yet. I got to forgotten it moment think it was brush going to put as doing so the coat realised couldn't use word again, so made up rest fdor picture brush stroke.Then wasn't sure on word off and of.So chanced it.Well it was our daughter didn't quite have the small prams then all true. Could have been a cross. She was lost in it 5lb 8oz.But insertponceyfre earlier helped kindly on off and of. Glad you liked it 10 minute doodling it. Ppaer has unusal birds about one from Russia and other's different owing climate.Well yesterday got to town in new boots a treat went into material shop wey got metre is that spelt right black chinese fabric cheap little Butterflies all over shines certain way of light.Get daughter do something with for me. And there were motives butterflies white pink sky blue silver.So had to have four sew on skirt or top.Fab. Oh! dear we have three steps from bedroom had soft backless slippers on stuff in my arms missed top step grazed knee and toe,clumsy clog. Do you watch t.v programme "Gok" brill: fashion designer puts women into round pear shape there's another one makes clothes by cutting jackets trimms with all fur cuffs jumpers jackets that gives me an ideas for motive I have. "Jeremy Iron" on t.v new does a fund children activities to do something w.w.w. something.But got long hair now. All must get involved says that's right.Well I have patted the stairs ok now. That's not daughters name on poem.Enjoy always yours way you can express yourself in many situations. Now ther saying children not read to, and can't speak time go to school. Thats why I think "The King's Speech" film is so wonderful. Yep I was must admit waiting you to give your kind comments and touch it up re;this poem.For me and all.I have gone back finish duck knitting for children's fund Easter no time church up late.Have a good week.I have gone mad on butterflies after your poem and Beeme's on butterflies, and brooches not the same many thanks reading it. Haven't made a banana cake for long time.Do you use a squirt touch of lemon. julie xx

Submitted by ScoZen on
ScoZen Hello Julie. As ever I enjoy your tales and your replies. Regards.
ScoZen

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new ScoZen Hi! thanks for comments. Do you really, I have a job sometimes. Most are life or experiences. Plenty of help from Editor t.cook (Tony) AbcTales team and many too say thankyou. I only tried comp; last year fun, had some from homeless group all of it was done by 16-80 year olds. 20 sentences put into poem or story. Staff would send it off to The Big Issue some get paid bit. CDs and short film done amazing and plastic oscars given all anfd celebs: hand out, shame finished. Books done free. Amazing what one could try or join in. Then on here different as punctuation it was all typed by the staff. Hope all is going well for you. Look foreward reading more of your's I am more of an agony aunt. Don't call myself poet. All headings on here at first I didn't know a thing. All lists of cherries Forum Track gradually learn't. When new one's come on I am truly amazed see so good first timers, compared to mine. Have a good week-end. Seen £The King's Speech" film brill: daughter treated me, now going to see "The Black Swan" nice to go pictures and with her. julie x