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Cherry

By ellydawn

Mon, 04 Feb 2008
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I am full
of emptiness
all form
no substance
My talent wasted
I am number 13
of 100,000
I am 0.9%
of the 90
the invisible
now visible
a magic act
in 3 parts
the Greek say
I lack desire
but I say I
desire too much
and if beauty
lies within then
I am pure
untouched
unsoiled
immaculate
I would have
been a better
candidate for
the role of Eve.

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Comments

Submitted by kim.rooney on
I really like the roll of this and its insistence. The last line sublime.

Kim Rooney

Submitted by edmund allos on
I agree. that last line is a haunting idea. It has left me feeling sad, which for me is a signifier of emotional engagement with the piece, which is what we all want, isn't it. Great poem.

Submitted by edmund allos on
and the title is spot on...I forgot to say!

Submitted by josephine.serieux on
i love it :)