Instant Message
By Ewan
Sun, 18 Jan 2009
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It died:
my computerised carrier
pigeon caught a cold
in the mountains.
I tried
the Short Message Service
but it was too terse
for sub-texting.
I cried
when the message-bottle
smashed, you can't reach the
sea from mountains.
I tied
a note to a heart-shaped
balloon and hoped it would blow
southward to you.
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Always a pleasure to read a
Always a pleasure to read a new poem of yours.
Lfuller
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Each stanza is perfect,
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Each stanza is perfect, though the last is possibly my favourite!
Magic xxx
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Beautifully simple. Loved
Permalink Submitted by Geoff Smith on
Beautifully simple. Loved it.
Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.
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There's something really
There's something really innocent about this poem. I think that's what makes it so effective.
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Final stanza is absolutely
Permalink Submitted by tamara on
Final stanza is absolutely beautiful but all is a masterpiece of poetry.
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Love this. Especially 'I
Love this. Especially 'I tied a note to a heart-shaped
balloon'
Very poignant.
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Just Class; well deserved
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Just Class; well deserved of the little red yokes ;)
Chris
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So you're not au fait with
So you're not au fait with the texting, then, Ewan ;)
(superb poem, by the way!)
J x
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I really enjoyed, sorry I'm
I really enjoyed, sorry I'm late commenting. A beautiful poem, Ewan. As always.
k.
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