Like a Little Candle

By Ewan

Fri, 25 Dec 2015
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In Bridcaster we talk of shopping arcades,

The Mall pronounced “Mal” is for TV parades.

My terrace starred in a charity show,

others' are places the Jehovahs won't go.

 

And Jesus bids us shine.

 

The internutters read of a light in the east,

the gullible take flight to join with the beast.

Bethlehem village lies behind a great wall,

does anyone remember the message at all?

 

And Jesus bids us shine.

 

The warriors came home from the glorious fight,

whimpered and shivered in the dark of the night.

The flags came down just one year ago,

they're sending men back to the Khyber, you know.

 

And Jesus bids us shine.

 

There is no candle to burn back the night,

there is fire and death in that dirty-bomb light.

There is only defending when both sides are right.

In the name of religion, they bring us this blight.

 

And Jesus bids us shine.

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by Bee on

I like the repetitions, but I felt that some of the rhymes were a little forced perhaps - for convenience - eg. the 'you know' in 'they're sending men back to the Khyber you know.' And should there be a apostrophe in Jehovah's as in the people belonging to him? Just wondered. I see it could work in plural, but doesn't seem quite right, as it's the people who are plural.

'just one your ago', - year?

Great message - comes across really well. 

Bee

Submitted by Ewan on

For reading and pointing out "your" vice year. Ha, not often I miss a typo.

As for jehovahs, do you mean an apostrophe? In the northern town where I used to live, we couldn't be bothered to say Jehovah's Witnesses and so we just called them "jehovahs" as if witnesses did not come into it. Now this, I am well aware, is disrespectful in any number of ways, but I think people still do this. If I write "Jehovah's" that isn't exactly what they are saying.

Yep, maybe that rhyme is a little forced, but it's a conversational piece, in its way.

Merry Christmas.

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Submitted by Bee on

Yeah, sorry about that, I meant apostrophe - I'll correct that. 

I was only meaning which was the plural - like more than one Jehovah, or people. But I wasn't sure...

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

not often I don't overlook a typo - being word blind to my own writing. Jesus bids us shine, for all of mankind and not just the few, you know as I do.