Faces of Snow

By Gabzgrl

Wed, 22 Aug 2012
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He sees only her ephemeral beauty
adoring her sweet smile, and still
love trumps a powdered world--
where a mind is darker than a pill

ugly girls weep under faces of snow
like stars wrapped in artificial light
narrated by an eternal hazy shadow
laughing to keep out winter's fright.

I wish it were easier-- I have to confess
to be as sugary and white as frosting on a cake.
to be unblemished by this absurd madness
For from this sleep, I'd never have to wake.

And if I had this wonderful dream,
I'd sell my soul for all the powder and cream,
Yet that is no life for the soulful dreamer,
you'll find yourself alone down there.

Deep down I am crying, and falling apart
Deep down a broken mind, a winter's heart
Yet the colors of life surely could free
In this insane world, an ugly girl like me.

Certificate U
The Reality Files
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by Sooz006 on
This is the second piece I've read of yours, in the last I felt that you were holding back on emotion which made the piece stronger. In this the emotion floods out which is perfect for this. You seem to have a good understanding of your writing. I like your style.

 

Submitted by Gabzgrl on
I'm glad you liked this poem. I was a little nervous about what people would think. My style is something I've worked on for a few years, and I'm always working to improve the voice and technique. Writing is one of my favorite hobbies. I was looking at your works, and wow you have had some awesome experiences. I also like your writing style-- you seem to be a seasoned writer, and I look forward to reading more of your writings. :)

The force be with you!

Gabrielle B-G

Submitted by Sooz006 on
Thank you. Keep posting, I'm looking forward to reading more from you.

 

Submitted by seashore on
I like this too, don't worry we all get nervous about posting - writing is all so personal.