Impenetrable Pride

Cherry

By ItsSteveDave

Tue, 06 Nov 2012
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i move from person to person
hoping one will be my father;
some enthusiastic words
and a passion for humanity
might wash over me,
purge years
of waiting for approval,
of impenetrable pride,
of ignoring one’s weaknesses
(and focussing on mine).
it never comes,
and i am the one
who must hold the olive branch
out to him,
as he gruffly tells me
‘i don’t like olives’.

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Submitted by Highhat on
Parent's seldom do the best things though some do try most of the time I think. This is sad Steve but very good. The allegory with the olive branch is great. ;)pia

Submitted by scratch on
Ooh that's good ISD. I (think) that I am a lot, lot older than you but you captured my thoughts and my sentiments. Thanks.

 

Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
Pia, thank you for your comment. I know it's not his fault - we're very different people. Military men don't appreciate too many questions, and I was a very questioning child - a misunderstanding of each other's intentions, I think. scratch - no problem! I think it's something that a lot of males grow up with. I guess it's just motivation to treat our own children differently. I'm not sure you're that much older than me though. I've got you pinned as late 30's early 40's (sorry if this is grossly offensive!) Thank you for your kind words, you're a gent.

Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
And lovely cherries, thank you, eds.

Submitted by Parson Thru on
Strong message, Steve. Nice attack I would say, if it were a piece on guitar. You made every word count.

Parson Thru

Submitted by hudsonmoon on
Powerful stuff, Steve. I know what it's like to have father issues. It's tough. You've captured the pain pretty well. Congrats on the cherries. Rioh

 

Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
Hi Parson, thank you for the comment, I'm really pleased you found it strong - a high compliment indeed, coming from you! Rich, I'm glad, and also sad, that you can relate, it's not nice at times, when you aren't given any margin for error. I've dived into the past with the sentiment of the poem - things are not as bad now, but it's a bit galling; if it's all ok now, why all the bullsh*t before? I hope all is well there in the aftermath of last week's events. Was in NY for the first time last November - truely the most incredible city I've ever visited.