Slow

'The misunderstanding glances The awkward romances I'm no good at taking chances, At least not like this. Can totally relate to this bit Jasper and I like the rhyme scheme in the poem, very nice.

Thought I will whine... did you mean thought here or did you mean though? Yes, I say I really should... I would put a comma after say. And don't want to keep down low... This is fine as it is, but I think stay down low maybe reads better. And don't want to keep down low This I really want to show This I want the World To know.... But I guess I'll take it slow.... I think the final stanza is stronger if you lose both of the uses of the word this Hi Jasper. On ABCTales we don't discriminate for or against people because of their age. The way I see it, you're kickin` it with the big boys, you can be judged by the standard of you work along with everybody else .... But, I am going to single this one out because of your age. It's raw, it's out there, it's real heart on your sleeve stuff, and if you can produce this at fourteen, you are going to be amazing later in life. This touched me and I think it's lovely.