At Eternity's Gate
By jonahs cough
Fri, 04 Mar 2011
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In a pool
Of sweat and dark memories
A lone swimmer
Carves out lengths
On the quivering surface
While the ticking of a clock
Gives dry conversation
And the corners of the room
Stay at once distant
And pressing.
A wind
That finds no barrier
In bricks and doors
Becomes a tangling,
Strangling bed sheet
And the voices of others,
Choked on their own quiet,
Lose flight in the air
And shatter
Against the ground.
The clutter of things
Of dust and papers,
Hung and sleepless,
Have left
God locked out.
Beat in silent hands
Moon in silent song
Trees in silent climb
Man in silent descent
At Eternity’s Gate.
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You captured such an empty
You captured such an empty mood and described it really well Jonahs- like everything had sort of come to a standstill.
;)Pia
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I agree. It's very evocative
I agree. It's very evocative of something, although I'm not sure what ...
Rob
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Some lovely imagery, here
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Some lovely imagery, here Jonah. Much enjoyed;-)
Tina
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Bleak, sad and strangely
Permalink Submitted by The Big Bad G on
Bleak, sad and strangely still. I like the way the silence in the last stanza seems to echo around the rest of the piece. It made me go back to the beginning and start again!
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