Mood colours (I.P.)

By Kahdai

Sat, 24 Jul 2010

3 comments

Blue lines
I watching
by my self
feeling ok
You arrive
sensed you
realise me
loving you

White Rose
in my post
make me :)
was it you

Orange now
for middle
new fusion
loss of me

Dark Stain
through me
shows hurt
scars heal

Lightnings
show me up
in my dark
you see me
& remember
don forget
love me in
back again

Permalink Submitted by kheldar on Sat, 2010-07-24 22:07

This, to me at least, is a great way of pacing a poem. Very unsual and very clever. David xx

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Sun, 2010-07-25 16:37

I agree with David - very clever and unusual structure, Kahdai. This one was worth the extra work ;) Magic xxx

Permalink Submitted by Kahdai on Sun, 2010-07-25 17:07

Yay :D thankyu both! I do many poems like this though, its how I think them in my head. I really like trying these I.P.s Kahdai xxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "