Button Moon

By Lavenderlooms

Thu, 08 Dec 2016
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Dear readers,

I am still trying to learn about poetry writing. I welcome any feedback or contructive criticism, I feel as though the only real way to learn is to just write as I go, hoopefully picking up more skill along the way. Here goes...

 

You brought me magic powers, I saw light.

New power, new life,

Coal eyes and hair like spun gold.

A baby button in the moonlight.

We did it our way,

I told you, mama is here.

You are bold, daring, loud

Should you need me, mama is here!

Small yet mighty, fast and fiesty.

I know you don't need my hand, you got this.

I enjoy watching you grow.

Thanking my lucky stars, baby button moon

Clouds have parted,

And there's nothing like your smile made of sun.

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by catherine poarch on

Hello LavendarLooms. Nice to read your poem and I liked the coal eyes and hair like spun gold. Also, I think your own voice comes through. I'd echo what Bear says - just write. I think it's a long apprenticeship, the opposite life of an athlete who has to burn quickly, and we're all learning. I'm not a great reader any more, in fact I struggle to read too many things on ABC in one go. But yes, read or listen. And listen to people's voices, everyday or otherwise. And song lyrics. And as they always say write about what you know, even if comes out as fantasy. And don't assume you have to write poems, try stories or anything else too. Oh, and don't give up! smiley