Something real not perfect

Cherry

By Louise178

Fri, 28 Jan 2011
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7 comments
 

What are you looking for?
not mountains and fallingsunsets
risingmoons, sweet bunny rabbits
and floppyears
oldlove on a postcard
fake as a polystyrene cup
give me something
gritty, dirty I can lay
these hands on
workout, decipher fathom
gluesniffingly nice
razor sharp
real as the 70's
tanktops flares toffee apples
make me smile make me laugh
put me on a mountain
behind the rising sun
we'll watch the stars
falling down with the moon
but make me smile make me laugh
give me something you, give me
something real that will last.

Certificate U
Poem
Poems
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
brilliant. even the tanktops

 

Submitted by Highhat on
I agree with Insert ;)Pia

Submitted by Louise178 on
Thanks guys, it was such brilliant fun to write that I don't really deserve a cherry aswell. But thanks anyway :)

Louise

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new louise178 Hi! liked all of this. Umm I can identify many words of yours in this lovely poem. Takes one back doesn't it.Do you remember the winky dolls, and the Ra! Ra! skirts our daughter had them then. Great time, flower power to. A good poem.Thanks. "Make me smile make me laugh". certainly did. julie x

Submitted by sonora on
'give me something gritty, dirty I can lay these hands on' - oh yes :o) Good stuff.

'Art is not a mirror to reflect reality, but a hammer with which to shape it.'

Submitted by seashore on
I love your writng. This is great.

Submitted by Louise178 on
Thanks seashore, you are kind :)

Louise