Close of day

Few words, but the atmosphere you create with them is highly effective. Tina

I like this poem. Every word counts and sets up the atmosphere. I especially like the "lowering sky" and the "heedless traffic". A good read.

Yes - I like it too because the atmosphere of grief is so obvious. The death of a loved one is bad enough but when that person dies alone and strangers have to sort through their lives, it's tragic. The title neatly says it all. Many writers don't value the title of a poem as part of the piece but consider it just an add-on... yours sets up the whole idea. Well done.

Heedless traffic, while the rest of the world has no idea, but you have made that person most important, here in your dark, atmospheric poem. K

Liked this a lot :) Rachel xx