Quarter to Zero Hour
By MistakenMagic
Thu, 07 May 2009
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For SP and RH
(6:45 pm)
She swills her red dress like wine,
baiting the bull inside. A pantomime,
spectator sport, let the audience come
and laugh like wolves to a frenzied drum.
No park bench - a music hall!
Where the rabble point and brawl.
You gorge yourselves on drama - I’ll starve you.
No more your jester. No, the fool
has discarded her bells, her burning stripes.
I stand here now, unpatterned, my final night
of performance, humbly I step forward.
Light bursts from doors; I’m deafened by the blinding roar
of the crowd and the hooves of my heart beat …
and they all throw roses at my feet.
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I agree. The imagery is very
Permalink Submitted by Geoff Smith on
I agree. The imagery is very vivid. I can't get my head around it completely but I did enjoy it.
Thanks.
JM.
Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.
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there is so much here that i
Permalink Submitted by Curse of 222 on
there is so much here that i like.the opening lines are so vivid and unique..."You gorge yourselves on drama - I’ll starve you."--perfect!..."the hooves of my heart beat …"--fantastic!...
you have a unique point of view, and i'm glad we get to peek through your eyes.
jason
jason
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Magic, this is a pearler
Magic, this is a pearler (sorry - not sure if Aussie vernacular translates but what I mean is it is very good). I'm still thinking about my possible entry. Good luck with yours.
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Fantastic imagery, love the
Fantastic imagery, love the abstract quality, am very jealous - since I have begun writing a lot of prose, the poetry won't come! Ah well, you far exceed my poetic efforts anyway, dear Target Audience!
J x
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Great piece Magic and I wish
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Great piece Magic and I wish I had seen it before I put my entry in and wasted a fiver. Up to your usual high standard (unfortunately lol). Good luck, I personally love it!
Chris XX
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wonderful stuff. Very
wonderful stuff. Very vivid.
I love the last paragraph. 'Hooves of my heart' is great poetry.
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