Siren
By MistakenMagic
Wed, 15 Oct 2008
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I am a mirage
born into a cradle
of opium dreams.
At night you sit
in your concave room,
basking in the violet
artificial glow
of the television screen,
watching me dance
across the frame.
But I tell you now,
if you were to peel back
my skin like wrapping paper
and rip the russet muscles
from my bones,
force open the doors
of my rib cage
as if opening a cupboard,
expecting to find
a magical land,
you would discover instead
my shrunken, cobwebbed heart;
her face turned away,
with a sign hanging around her neck
that reads;
Back in ten years,
after I have washed
the blood from
my hands.
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Not quite sure how you do
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Not quite sure how you do it, Magic, but you manage to create such an atmosphere with your poetry and this is certainly no exception.
" ... if you were to peel back
my skin like wrapping paper
and rip the russet muscles
from my bones ..."
Brilliant imagery here and 'rip the russet muscles' an effective use of alliteration.
The ending is rich in dark 'Macbeth-like' undertones.
Good work, Magic:-)
Tina x
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that's amazing poetry :Oo
Permalink Submitted by littleditty on
that's amazing poetry :Oo
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Wow,what a talent you
Permalink Submitted by tamara on
Wow,what a talent you have!beautiful magic.x
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Agreed - a very good poem
Agreed - a very good poem and well worth the cherry.
Not sure about the reference to opium dreams though - and I guess the concave room is the chest and the entrance to the heart.
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wonderful opening and some
wonderful opening and some superb phrases throughout. Nice work. Margot
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