Bereavement

By misskelizabeth

Fri, 12 Oct 2012
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Unendingly I mourn my precious mother
Who told me in this letter?
Not to grieve and make peace
Then things will begin to get better
But she is not here
She does not sleep
And she expects me not to weep
I hold on tightly to those who still stand
But I miss the way you hugged me
And always held my hand
I’m trying to stop the water from my eye
Run down my cold and frosted cheek
I used to wake from my dreams
Because I felt you were near
But as soon as I blinked
You began to disappear
I miss you mother
More than you could imagine
But now you living happily in heaven
Life goes on and I’ll make you proud
Just give me a month and then look down
Times gone on and I’ve said my prayers
But thank god the memories are still there.

Certificate U
Poem
Horror

Comments

Submitted by Sooz006 on
Heartfelt and beautiful.

 

Submitted by Denzella on
Oh, Kate, This is so beautiful it brought tears to my eyes. The words you chose to convey your innermost feelings were nothing short of magical. Moya
 

Submitted by misskelizabeth on
Thank-you. I'm glad it comes across just the way it feels, I don't think one word could describe this but its lovely to see that you think this is beautiful. Thanks again, Mrs Howell

 

Submitted by steve_elliott04 on
Just beautiful, and so very emotional! Your carefully chosen and starkly meaningful words really stir something within the reader. This is a tender insight into the writer's mind and soul. A difficult subject perfectly penned. Thanks. Steve

Submitted by misskelizabeth on
Hello Steve, That's a great compliment and I'm glad you enjoyed the insight of my writing. Thanks, Kate

 

Submitted by BlackInk on
This is one of the most raw, emotional, and selfless pieces I have read yet. Parts of it made me feel this grief and overwhelming sadness for your struggles. My condolnces go out for you. You are truly a person to admire. As for my critique, the only one I can give is: it had a very nice flow at the beginning and end, but, in the middle it got a little choppy. I wouldn't worry about that too much though, this piece is still an amazing work of art. c: -Cole

-Cole

Submitted by misskelizabeth on
Thank-you very much for the critique and compliments, My work is a peice of therapy and I'm glad it gets you very emotional, it means my job works. Thanks for taking the time to read this as it truly came from the heart Kate Howell