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Cherry

By Myndstorm

Wed, 26 Aug 2009
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The sun refused its duty
pulling a comforter of grey
over its head, ignorant,
as the frustrated sky
filled up with tears.
Below, I sit and catch the drops
upon my tongue
the rain tasting of bittersweet yesterdays
And I half smile, recollecting

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Submitted by Ewan on
Loved the imagery. You might want to think about the punctuation. Or do not punctuate at all, which might work nicely with this poem. Regards Ewan

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Submitted by Beeme on
Hello Myndstorm, this is such a beautiful poem, and I too loved the imagery. Beeme xx

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Submitted by sunshine on
Yes, lovely imagery - last few lines are pearls. Margot

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Excellent; nothing wasted, a really good short with superb imagery. Well done! Chris ;)

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Quiet, lovely. Like the image of the Sun as a sluggard, memorable :-) atb Lena