Dear Mother...

By Natalia

Mon, 20 Aug 2012
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I want you to know that wherever you are, I am safe.
There are kind people here who want me. I rejoice in the fact that I am wanted in this world.
They love me, as you never loved me.
They care for me, as you never cared for me.
They support me, as you never supported me.
After wandering in the sea for so long, I have finally come ashore. My life has meaning for the first time. I am no longer homeless.
Mother, she wipes my tears when I cry. I smile as I write this. You would've brushed me and my sorrows away. But that is all right, for I knew you had deep troubles of your own. I do not blame you. But nevertheless, it is somehow comforting to have someone wipe your tears for you.

I worry about you every day, mother.
Every day I hope you are all right. I suppose you will be angered further to hear from me, especially after the recent events that have taken place (in regards to which I offer my sincere condolences), but I am your daughter and neither you nr I can change this.

Every day I take long walks with Betty and her husband. Sometimes we inhale the fresh mountain air; at other times we visit the beach and feel the wet sand on our soles. Mother, it is so lovely. These walks are the most beautiful things I have ever experienced. Every day, when we walk, I think about you, because beautiful things remind me of you.

I know you are safe for the remainder of your years in this world. I only hope there is someone to wipe your tears for you.

Much love

Your daughter

Christina

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Comments

Submitted by ItsSteveDave on
Natalia, this is beautiful and upsetting, and your positivity throughout this peice of writing, and indeed a very sad situation (I have assumed this is a personal story, sorry if not!), is inspiring. Well done.

Submitted by Jessiibear on
This is great, Natalia. I really did like it. It's not only refreshing and bittersweet, but it lets my mind wander. And I, personally, like when a piece can do that. You have potential, and it's so easy to see. I'm a young writer, too, by the way, and I don't have much professional insight. But you have this style about you that I like. Keep at it!

Jess

Submitted by Denzella on
Hello Natalia, Yes, this is a beautiful story very well expressed. I really enjoyed it and wanted you to know. Moya
 

Submitted by Natalia on
Thank you Moya, ItsSteveDave and Jessica. Natalia

Natalia :)

Submitted by seashore on
A really interesting piece this.

Submitted by Natalia on
Thank you seashore :)

Natalia :)

Submitted by mikepyro on
After wandering in the sea for so long, I have finally come ashore - I like the piece, but this is rather cliche for what is such a serious, but I feel shouldn't be burdened by fluffy imagery, piece. you nr I - nor I with Betty and her husband - I feel she should give the husband's name, why wouldn't she? This was a simple, powerful, unique piece. Emotional and true.

Give me the beat boys and free my soul! I wanna getta lost in ya rock n' roll and drift away. Drift away...

Submitted by Natalia on
Thanks mike! Will correct that error and your other comments are also appreciated.

Natalia :)