The Unheard Voice

By Natalia

Sat, 11 Aug 2012
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Never once
Never once
Did you listen
Did you listen?

A mere whisper
Lost to the winds
Left to her hands
Moulded by his fingers

Did you not ask me?
Speak to me
Incessantly; unheedingly
While my voice

Remained unheard

Tell me
If am wrong
In saying this
Today

You exploited my speech
Prevented me
From expressing
My pains

Stories untold
Forgotten in my heart
They wait; nevertheless
For ears to come past

Somewhere
In the near future
Would, could
You listen to me?

Certificate U
Poem
Songs of Love
Opinion

Comments

Submitted by jolono on
Natalie, can i be honest? of course I can! You put up in the forum about getting feedback on your work, not just comments like " Enjoyed or good read etc" My problem here is, I can't find anything wrong with this at all. I really like the way you put a question mark at the end of the fourth line. That put's a whole different slant to that first bit and makes you stop because it's asking a question. I'm unsure if I would have put "Master" in there, it almost makes the poem have a different meaning. But, here we go, a very enjoyable read!

 

Submitted by Natalia on
I'm actually laughing out loud now jolono! True, I did say that, but if you take a walk back to that forum you'll see I've learnt something from all this too. In regards to your comment, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Yes, I will have to find a suitable word to replace Master, I think it sort of kills the mood. Natalia (still giggling away at the controversy her post has caused down in the forum!)

Natalia :)