Undercurrents

By Pat G

Wed, 04 Apr 2018
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Water

          ~  washes away the touches,

touches that cause trembles,

trembles felt unfathomably,

unfathomably close to experience.

          ~  leaves a hungry thirst,

thirst for fingers disturbing cool,

cool undercurrents caressing,

caressing smooth, glazed boulders.

          ~  transports cargoes of needs,

needs floating on imperfections,

imperfections in the ripples,

ripples that swell with the thought.

 

 

 

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Comments

Submitted by iwylie on

Beautiful, left my mind awash (haha) with beauty. Thank you for sharing! 

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thanks for the comment, and for making me laugh.

Submitted by london_calling79 on

I like the use of punctuation and the gentle spill of words from one line to the next.

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for reading this and commenting. Much appreciated.

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Beautiful. I found this deeply sensual, am I reading it right?

 

Submitted by Pat G on

It seems to gone in that direction, out of my control. Ha ha. But I suppose it's for readers to decide. Thanks so much for commenting.

Submitted by Alice Hamilton on

Yes, a beautifully crafted poem: fluid, elegant, subtle. I enjoyed reading the words aloud. I like the tildes too, most appropriate - waves!

 

Submitted by Pat G on

I appreciate the comments. Thank you.

Submitted by Denzella on

Hello Pat G,

I liked your poem very much.  The words seemed to come in waves just like the tide or so it seems to me.

 

Submitted by Pat G on

Thank you for reading and commenting Denzella. I like your comment about waves.