War With Words

By pinda

Sun, 19 Jul 2009
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I battle with armor.
Made up of simplisticly sweet metaphors.
I spit karma into your blood.
Made you scared to turn a corner in your hood.
I hit you with my catchy lies.
Made you think what's true and wear a disguise.
I spit words that hurt you.
Made you hurt and bruised with black eyes.
so I stay in best condition.
Till composition.
Is in decomposition.

Certificate U
Story
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Beeme on
I liked this, Pinda. Well done.

k.

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Like this Pin, I would change the second 'spit' though, to throw or something; 'I throw words that hurt you..' just to save the repetition. Good stuff! Chris ;)

Submitted by Jupiter on
Sorry to disagree with Chris ;-) but I feel the repetition adds power to the piece, although it does seem that 'spit' (in English) is at odds with "simplisticly sweet metaphors!" I think we are having a language translation problem again and as you are in the US, I guess US lingo is best for the piece. Hey mate! That's the nature of the game - which way do you go eh? Only you really know! ha! ha! Got to say though that I love the idea of I spit karma into your blood Wish I could do that ;-)