Askew

By Rhiannonw

Mon, 30 May 2016
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Seeing distortions,
beauty contortions,
fears spike freaking,
foundations fracked,
fractured;
focus awry –
blurring, swirling,
grip slipping,
flounder, blunder;
grimaces grotesque –
nightmaresque.

Truth cools the brain,
thoughts stilled and sane:
things evil, vile and ugly
remain,
but the good    
understood:
no terror;
sight steadied,
glimpsed hope.

 

 

Certificate U
Poetry Monthly
Miscellaneous
Surreal
Philosophy

Comments

Submitted by celticman on

hope leads the way, although often the last word in your poem, I'd say, put it first and not last, then reason and rhyme will surpass. 

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Interesting comment, Celt. When hope leads the way, such fears will be stilled, and many things make sense. I was thinking about getting a grip on struggles and scenarios where things are overwhelming, like children waking from a nightmare, and finding the principles to think sanely about things. If you're suggesting I reorganise the poem, I'll have to think on that! Thanks, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

This poem is full of frightening images - and as you say, hope is the cure in the end. Lovely.#

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean. I never did like grotesqueness in images, but talking the children through fears, I learnt to value that truth and hope, hope in truth, gave the answer to sorting out and having a stable perspective on everything that  troubled them, or got thrown their way. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

you know this bought back memories of when I was about six or seven, I had a tree outside my house and when it was windy the branches would reflect onto my bedroom wall from the lamplight outside, this used to petrify me and I always thought the tree was going to get me. Of course my imagination worked overtime, I suppose it still does up to a degree. 

I thought you gave some well chosen words to express the fear. 

Great work.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny. People seem to like saying that children like to be frightened, - but only, I think if they know it what is imagination, and what is the truth about help in real life frights. Rhiannon