Past the Night of Day

Richard, this has a different feel from your other stuff, more serious and considered. I like short poetry especially when it is as well observed as this. A couple of observations if I may? Try and find a better adjective than "clash" to describe the lightning. I don't think that there is any need for the double hyphen between the two stanzas, in fact I think that their inclusion detracts from the flow of the poetry. Please remember that this is only my subjective and personal opinion. A good poem Richard, well done.