Mist
By samhennig
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Mist lies heavy against
the bed our houses make,
lying in, whilst we all wake
and make our way through
frost covered landscape,
where long grasses stand,
white with morning cool.
The train is nearly full
but I take one of the awkward
seats that line the carriage
and force you too close to
the people either side.
The woman opposite is
elegant especially for a
Friday, but her scruffy backpack
and headphones belie her.
Comfort becomes nobody
and the smell of stale coffee
seeps through the stale air.
As trees flash past, sunlight
pierces the in between; still
low in the sky, burning through
frost on warehouse roofing.
The city with all its promise
gleams as we approach, great
structures taking root, taking
everything and giving nothing
back. People rush to greet it,
a Mecca of toil that has us trapped,
the elegant lady dons her backpack,
marching forth as though to war
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The early morning commute
The early morning commute made magical. I loved the contrast between the grasses 'white with morning cool' and the fullness and awkwardness of the train.
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Gives the picture of the sun
Gives the picture of the sun breaking through the mist on the two scenes, home garden/countryside and town toil. Rhiannon
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A mundane morning commute
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I found this a beautiful read
I found this a beautiful read, still and frosty. I loved the lines 'comfort becomes nobody' and 'the city with all its promise gleams....' and the idea of the battles that lie ahead.
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