A life unlived

By seashore
Sat, 19 Mar 2011
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14 comments
A young man
terrified
of becoming his father
marries a girl
he barely knows
has never even
kissed
with no warning
where this strange union
will take him
Years later
the blame is all his,
she tells him
over and over
as he sits mute, curled
inside himself
waiting
Now, looking into my
father's coffin
I see the shape of a man
no more familiar
in death than in life.
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Yes Coral, you have got it
Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Yes Coral, you have got it just right. Congrats. on the cherry.
Luigi x
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Well done seashore - I don't
Well done seashore - I don't know what has changed but it has a lovely balance to it this one. :-)
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You sure did get there,
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You sure did get there, Coral;-)
Tina
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So much story in so few
So much story in so few words - admirable and much enjoyed.
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new Seashore Yes, I to liked
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Seashore
Yes, I to liked this.
Images surrounding poem
julie x
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the blame is all his, she
the blame is all his,
she tells him
over and over
as he sits mute, curled
inside himself
waiting
It doesn't seem like you struggled at all. It's like one of those flint arrowheads, chipped into sharpest point
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