Outsiders
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Sun, 03 Apr 2011
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They have begun to come in
from the cold
Jostling for space
on the window sills...
...despite the dangers
of radiators
Tending toward
gossamery light
Groups gather
on the landing...
...dangling spidery babies
over the bannister
A pretty maiden-hair
hogs the bathroom
Mother-in-law holds her tongue
in the kitchen
The mantle plays host
to evening prayers
Confused, Jasmine
comes out
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I liike this shoe - strange
I liike this shoe - strange but demanding more reads, and I agree with you about punctuation in poetry as well - I over punctuate mine to the point where I confuse myself and I'm gonna start to try and use less. ATB Fatboy. :-)
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I thought they were your
I thought they were your overwintering plants coming in from the frost? Works a treat. :-)
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Enjoyed. But...?
Enjoyed.
But...? "...Mother-in-law holds her tongue..."
Well, well. I have never,ever, known that happen?
ScoZen
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I love all the little
Permalink Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
I love all the little details of this poem, it reads as if I'm gazing at a painting
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Love this one, shoe and also
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Love this one, shoe and also the 'non-punctuation'. It works well;-)
Tina
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Some really great imagery
Permalink Submitted by Overthetop1 on
Some really great imagery here - and yep, the puncuation thing makes an extra - interesting read - if that makes any sense. God - dashes, commas, quotation marks - I am hopeless at all that!
Overthetop1
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