Sorry, I thought...

Cherry

By shoe

Mon, 23 May 2011
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21 comments
 

...that we'd go to Gretna green
even though, officially, it would be bigamy,
and we'd live in a tiny bare studio flat and
spend rainy saturdays on the sofa bed
watching each other read,
and in summer we would go on picnics
with bread and rough wine,
dozing in uncut hay meadows,
I even bought underwear...
after you'd kissed me

Certificate 12
Poem
You're O.K, I'm not O.K
Love

Comments

Submitted by seekerofwords on
a delightful read! I was transported there............just sipping a little rough wine! Namaste, Lenny

easy on the mayo dude!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Beautiful, this;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes beautiful ;)Pia

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
oh this is so sad!

 

Submitted by seashore on
loved it

Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Ah, the end of a dream. How easy is to be taken in. I particularly like the closing lines.

 

Submitted by InspiredWriter on
Lovely, truly beautiful. X

Noah

Submitted by shoe on
Thank you all so, so much, I really appreciate your comments, cheers,

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
This is pretty wonderful shoe. :-)

 

Submitted by barryj1 on
You did the very best thing that a poet could ever do: told a first-rate story (along the lines of George Elliot's thousand-page Middlemarch) in ten succint lines. I apologize, in advance, for becoming overly verbose.

barryj1

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Packs so much into so few words. Very good indeed!

 

Submitted by shoe on
Thank you very, very much, I'm one happy girl!

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New shoe Well deserved cherry! yes, definitely short but packed with all, it is sad but says so much. julie xx

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
"spend rainy saturdays on the sofa bed watching each other read" - love, love, love these lines, Shirley! A truly beautiful poem. Well done on the cherry :) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Oh and could I also ask if you're Ok for me to post a link to this on my Twitter? Think it's a great poem that my followers would enjoy! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks Julie, glad you like it. Thanks Magic, and yes, I'd love to be linked, I am on twitter but rarely use it, I might have another look though.

 

Submitted by anna_tempt on
'... even though, officially, it would be bigamy ...' love that! funny, clever and ... painful.

 

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
a small poem that says a lot, beautiful writing that really reels you in

 

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks both very much.

 

Submitted by Geoffrey on
This brings back long forgotten memories. I agree with several of your admirers, so much packed into a small space.

Submitted by kheldar on
A sad story told in a beautiful way. very well done !!!! :--) xxx

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