Seafaring Phantom

By skinner_jennifer

Mon, 02 May 2011
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17 comments
 

Soft breezes blow,
the only sound...
the crashing of the waves,
the swell of the sea
breaking on the shore,

a flat bottomed boat
lies in shallow water,
left alone neglected,
barren...
decomposing wood,

one man waits
a fisherman maybe,
staring out to sea
ever waiting...
a land lover he is not,

a ghostly figure he becomes
ceasing to exist,
disembodied...
his soul yearning
for what will never be.

Certificate PG
Poem
Poems
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Wow - a haunting piece, Jenny! I can see the fisherman now. Well done! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Magic, thankyou so much for your fine comment, it's truely appreciated. Jenny. xxx

 

Submitted by seashore on
One of your best, Jenny. I loved it.

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Wow! thankyou seashore, that is wonderful, you've made my day. Jenny.

 

Submitted by prettyrose on
Great Poem like always Jenny :):))) It wasn't so much scary for me sorry if that was the intent like magic said :) but made me pine for the sea as I love it so much, so a nice warm feeling covered with annoyed I am not by the sea feeling lol. But yes thinking on it Magic late at night staying in a cabin or beach house by the sea reading this, I am sure we would feel a chill Jenny lol either way your a gifted writer with a lovely personality to match :)))

smiley Keep Smiling

Keep Writing xxx

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Prettyrose, what a lovely comment, yes I totally agree with you, being by the sea, staying in a cabin would be such a wonderful experience. Glad that I could bring some of that magic to you. By the way, I'm overwhelmed at your wonderful words to me, I really don't know what to say. But thankyou for reading, glad you enjoyed. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi SundaysChild, It's so kind of you to read and take the time to leave a comment, it's always appreciated. Glad you enjoyed. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
It seems we both had the sea on our minds this afternoon, Jenny. This is a beautiful poem. You really do paint a wonderful picture with your words. Tina;-)

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
Jenny you've done a really good job of building up the atmosphere in this poem - I especially like the first stanza

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes I agree with all that has been said. Wonderfully haunting and maybe even a bit sad with the longing "phantom".

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Again this is really good Jenny - you are being more economical with your phrasing and missing some words out which is working really well. Really effective. Keep it going! :-)

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, isn't it strange how the sea draws you back, time and time again? I hope you had a fine day in your garden and thankyou so much for reading and your kind words. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi insert, thankyou so much for reading, I'm so glad you enjoyed and also thankyou for the great comment. I have to say, that the whole poem led on from that first stanza, the phantom and the boat just came into my mind. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, I'm glad you picked up on the saddness of that poor soul longing to be out at sea, but only watching and waiting. Thankyou so much for reading and your kind comment. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi fatboy, what a very nice comment you have made, I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem. I have to say that I'm learning all the time on this great place ABC Tales. It's only through the help of others, that I can learn to get better, so I really do appreciate the comment. Thankyou, Jenny.

 

Submitted by mikepyro on
Def better than the last poem of yours I read. I enjoy the subtle beauty and flow but most of all I like the fact that you don't insist on filling it with overly flowery imagery and instead use simple imhes to focus on the profound experience of the fisher. Nicely done!

Give me the beat boys and free my soul! I wanna getta lost in ya rock n' roll and drift away. Drift away...

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi mikepyro, it's very kind of you to read this poem, I do appreciate your feedback and great comment. Glad you enjoyed this one. Thankyou, Jenny.