A SICKENED EARTH
By skinner_jennifer
Thu, 14 Oct 2010
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There was a violent explosion,
the earth began to quake and shiver.
Fire raged across the earth,
the core erupted,
It sucked the vital life from the surface.
Gases released putrid, unearthly smells,
the chaos of time searching for its kill.
A red mist formed like a blanket,
across the vast expanse of sky,
a glow that made it seem like hell.
The brutish beast enveloping the earth,
the waters turning to sludge,
dirty sediment congealing,
like an oily liquid,
to kill all of life.
And yet from all this chaos came new life,
a life that could resist antagonism,
this state of hostile conflict.
Though the old life had died,
so a new life was created.
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This is wonderfully
This is wonderfully descriptive Jenny. I love the catchy ending, rounds it off really well, you could get very passionate when reading this, I did, because it's so descriptive, you can put lots of menace in to it as you read it. :)
Louise
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I like the way we can expect
I like the way we can expect a lot of beauty after the eruption and new birth. wonderful poem Jenny.
;)Pia
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Hey, Jenny, this is very
Permalink Submitted by TREVOR MAYTUM on
Hey, Jenny, this is very deep and moving, quite different to what I'm used from you, Very good, and very thought provoking too. Well done!
Trev
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It's dramatic and there are
It's dramatic and there are some good metaphors: "A life that could resist antagonism" fantastic!
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Love that second stanza,
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love that second stanza, Jenny - gorgeously gritty! Well done :)
Magic xxx
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I liked the drama and the
Permalink Submitted by well-wisher on
I liked the drama and the description in this poem and the choice of 'Free Verse' suited the subject matter. I also like how the poem begins with an explosion, that grabbed my attention.
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Brilliant poem, Jenny.
Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on
Brilliant poem, Jenny. Death and destruction, hope and promise - you've captured the essence of each so well in this, was a joy to read and the explosion caught my attention too :)
Very much enjoyed,
Rachel xx
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