IF—I—NEVER—

By staticshakedown

Sun, 09 Sep 2012
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If—I—never—let—you—go
Will—you—stay—by—my—window
To—tell—me—words—I—know—I—knew
But—sound—so—new—when—I'm—with—you?
If—I—never—let—you—go
Will—that—time—from—long—ago
Break-a-way—or—breakthrough?
Hurt—me—less—or—hurt—anew?
Will—you—never—tell—me—no
If—I—never—let—you—go?

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Submitted by Sooz006 on
I'll be singing Breakaway by Gallagher and Lyle for the rest of the day now. I normally hate gimmicks in writing so, because of the hyphens I should hate this. But I don't, in fact, I think it works well (just this once, mind) Because every word has one it's pleasing to the eye. I'm still going to ask why? Why did you chose to structure it like that. What was the point to writing it in that way rather than just putting the words down? What's the motivation behind it. I ask because I'm interested not because I'm criticising it. I like this.

 

Submitted by staticshakedown on
Thank you for the comment! I myself go back and forth with how gimmicky I am with my writing style. The hyphens appeared in my head when I was first visualizing writing down the poem. I thought connecting all the words went with the "never letting go" idea, as well as kind of forcing the flow of words to a steady pace. Not sure if that idea got communicated completely though, ha ha.