Idea for poem structure: A Word Symphony

Cherry

By well-wisher

Thu, 30 Aug 2012
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8 comments
 

Drip
by
drip
and
drop
by
drop,
rain starts to fall
then will not stop.

It glimmers and glistens
and shimmers and shines,
it rattles and clatters
and splashes and…

But then the sun;
great noble sun,
its joyous face,
begins to shine.

Spreading broad rays;
its golden gaze
touching the world
with warmth divine.

Red and
yellow and
orange and blue;
green and pink and
indigo too
out comes a rainbow
of beautiful hues.

But
then,
suddenly…

Dark clouds prowl in;
wild winds howling,
claws of lightning;
thunder growling.

Crash goes the thunder;
flash goes the lightning;
the sky splits asunder,
it’s fierce and its frightening.

But then the sun,
great noble sun,
its joyous face
begins to shine.

Spreading broad rays,
its golden gaze
touching the world
with warmth divine.

Now
wind subsides
into a gentle breeze,
birds start to twitter merrily in trees,
bobbing blooms flirt with butterflies and bees
and all of the world seems to be at ease.

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Comments

Submitted by well-wisher on
Gosh, thanks Cherrypickers. Glad you liked it. Every time I listen to a romantic symphony by a composer like Mussorgsky or Beethoven, I always think that something similar could be done with words and the weather, with its pizzicato rain drops and timpani drum thunder seemed a suitable subject.

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Submitted by Jessiibear on
This is beautiful. Perfect imagery. I love this one.

Jess

Submitted by well-wisher on
Thank you, Jessica. I really hoped to show changes from bright to dark and from stormy to tranquil the way that changes occur in music. I'm sure others could do far better but I just wanted to give it a try. Glad you enjoyed it.

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Submitted by Sooz006 on
I commented on this but it's gone... maybe forgot to click send or whatever. I said that I really liked it, too, great pace.

 

Submitted by well-wisher on
Thanks, Sooz. But then suddenly looked a bit like a lightning bolt on the page, thats why I put it in although it may seem a bit corny. I thought of the sun as a heroic brass section bursting out from behind black kettle drum clouds and restoring order. Glad you liked it.

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Submitted by Highhat on
I have a sneaky feeling that music means a lot to you well-wisher. This is a lovely symphony.. well done- I used to tap on the typewriter in tune with music once- it was fun.

Submitted by Denzella on
Fabulous! Absolutely fabulous! I loved it from start to finish. I thought the form was excellent in the way that it made the poem gather pace and then slowed things down only to quicken up again like with music but it also reminded me of W H Auden with his train poem although there was no change of pace with his. If I could write poetry then I would be so proud of this one. Enjoyment overload! Moya
 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Caught somewhere between poetry and music - this is a beautifully rich piece, well-wisher. It does indeed drip off the page and sounds wonderful to the ear. Well done on the cherries! Magic xxx