The leaf breaks and falls, drifts on a lilt of air and falls again, down decades of green light and bounteous rain, still falling…. sweet as a kite,...
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Really liked the quickness of
Posted on Tue, 08 Mar 2016
Really liked the quickness of this, right down to the lash of that buzzing thought. It feels like a kid taking a deep breath and saying it all in one go. The Queen passed me once too when I was a child and apparantly she smiled at us but I was...
I think you've been saying goodbye ever since in all these beautiful poems. Each one is a gift to her. Without meaning to sound trite I'm sure she reads them. The grains of sand on the beach and the picture of the little girl on the beach with...
I have no expertise here. I think I'd be tempted by symmetery, not to mention safety. All I can say is - you don't need to decide yet? Let the answer come to you. Revel in getting better.
I liked the shape too. It's almost symmetrical but the slightly thicker end reflects the build up. And the thinest bit, the middle, hinges on the but! It's great when you don't plan a shape but it has a life of its own. It makes me think of my...
Real nightmare words, well written. I didn't guess the end and then of course had to go back and reread. I felt the thing about keep talking was very strong, that thing that keeps your mind above the water, to use words, communicate, reason with...
Brilliant. It starts in one place and then goes somewhere I didn't expect and ends up with this terrible loneliness of the wild geese flying, but in that those last few words there's some feeling of stillness.
I'm definitely with the last stanza too. Some beautiful sense of continuity in those lines. Maybe what makes them so effective is the almost matter of fact opening? A bit like keeping a log. It's obviously struck a chored, must be one of those...
This is intriguing which I'm not sure I've spelt right? And original. I like the structure, with the spaces in between. Loads of lovely descriptions, it wants to be read again. And the last two lines are great!
Really liked the quickness of
Posted on Tue, 08 Mar 2016
Really liked the quickness of this, right down to the lash of that buzzing thought. It feels like a kid taking a deep breath and saying it all in one go. The Queen passed me once too when I was a child and apparantly she smiled at us but I was...
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I think you've been saying
Posted on Sat, 12 Dec 2015
I think you've been saying goodbye ever since in all these beautiful poems. Each one is a gift to her. Without meaning to sound trite I'm sure she reads them. The grains of sand on the beach and the picture of the little girl on the beach with...
Read full commentPosted in About My Daughter...
I have no expertise here. I
Posted on Sat, 05 Dec 2015
I have no expertise here. I think I'd be tempted by symmetery, not to mention safety. All I can say is - you don't need to decide yet? Let the answer come to you. Revel in getting better.
Read full commentPosted in Result! part 2.
a lovely poem of remembrance,
Posted on Sun, 08 Nov 2015
a lovely poem of remembrance, about the simplest of symbols. I love how the poppies have a life of their own.
Read full commentPosted in Blithe Spirit
I liked the shape too. It's
Posted on Fri, 24 Apr 2015
I liked the shape too. It's almost symmetrical but the slightly thicker end reflects the build up. And the thinest bit, the middle, hinges on the but! It's great when you don't plan a shape but it has a life of its own. It makes me think of my...
Read full commentPosted in My Other Life is
Real nightmare words, well
Posted on Wed, 01 Apr 2015
Real nightmare words, well written. I didn't guess the end and then of course had to go back and reread. I felt the thing about keep talking was very strong, that thing that keeps your mind above the water, to use words, communicate, reason with...
Read full commentPosted in Walk About a Bit
There seem so many
Posted on Sat, 03 Jan 2015
There seem so many similarities between birth and death. I always find that comforting, to be honest. This is a beautiful poem.
Read full commentPosted in Epiphany
Brilliant. It starts in one
Posted on Fri, 28 Nov 2014
Brilliant. It starts in one place and then goes somewhere I didn't expect and ends up with this terrible loneliness of the wild geese flying, but in that those last few words there's some feeling of stillness.
Read full commentPosted in Only Silence Speaks the Language of Birds
I'm definitely with the last
Posted on Wed, 01 Oct 2014
I'm definitely with the last stanza too. Some beautiful sense of continuity in those lines. Maybe what makes them so effective is the almost matter of fact opening? A bit like keeping a log. It's obviously struck a chored, must be one of those...
Read full commentPosted in October's Geese
This is intriguing which I'm
Posted on Sat, 13 Sep 2014
This is intriguing which I'm not sure I've spelt right? And original. I like the structure, with the spaces in between. Loads of lovely descriptions, it wants to be read again. And the last two lines are great!
Read full commentPosted in The most beautiful morning
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