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you rated the story fine! It
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
you rated the story fine! It's just if you know you have something not U rated in the first few lines, then make sure you create a teaser without those words - so in this instance I omitted the 'fucked in the head'. I hope that makes sense
Read full commentPosted in Some False Sense Of Security
You've correctly categorised
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
You've correctly categorised this as an 18, but the teaser (which defaults to the first couple of lines) appears on the front page, and so it has to be U rated - as well as the title. I've fixed this one for you
Read full commentPosted in Some False Sense Of Security
if it's published, why not
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
if it's published, why not put a link here, so people can buy it? If not, I'd love to read another extract!
Read full commentPosted in Mwambeshi Memories
A delightful piece of life
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
A delightful piece of life writing. Is it part of something bigger?
Read full commentPosted in Mwambeshi Memories
A good start! I like the way
Posted on Sun, 10 Apr 2016
A good start! I like the way it jumps all over the place (in sync with the character). Do post more soon
Read full commentPosted in Vodka
A very interesting idea!
Posted on Sat, 02 Apr 2016
A very interesting idea!
Read full commentPosted in Another time Another Place
I didn't see that coming!
Posted on Wed, 30 Mar 2016
I didn't see that coming! This might work even better if you drew it out a bit - spent more time on the hunt for the man, perhaps even his history. Very well done as it is though!
Read full commentPosted in Scarlet sunrise
couple of typos in this:
Posted on Fri, 25 Mar 2016
couple of typos in this:
look pass the bed
look pass the person
and also I'm not sure about a la chacun - shouldn't it be chacun a ses besoins etc?
Read full commentPosted in Caffeine Supernova, #1
Typo: it's Jackson Pollock
Posted on Sat, 19 Mar 2016
Typo: it's Jackson Pollock
also I think Warhol used soup cans, not beans
Interesting piece - thank you!
Read full commentPosted in Today's Art Scene
I will be looking forward to
Posted on Sat, 12 Mar 2016
I will be looking forward to part two as well. You've done a good job with introducing different aspects of what looks to be an interesting plotline.
About the tenses: the best thing would be to find someone to read it through - or read it...
Read full commentPosted in Searching for Change ch.1
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