Storm Waiting
By S.P.D.
Sun, 14 Oct 2007
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Storm Waiting
Heat. Sweat. Car-dust. Rank odours creep from drains.
Belligerent sky rumbles, withholding rain.
I mooch disgruntled through the city streets,
Dragging my will on swollen, dirty feet.
‘Hashish?’ a slouching Arab softly calls.
He leans in sullen shade against a wall.
I shake my head and try to hasten past,
Watching him, wary, in the shop-fronts’ glass.
Forty degrees, so humid. Stores succumb...
Grey, roll-down eyelids shuttered, one by one.
No stamina for commerce, nor for fun,
Scarcely a soul outside till evening comes.
I wait the storm’s beginning, in a square,
And urge the rain, come soon to purge the air.
© S.P.D.
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Where have you been hiding?
Where have you been hiding? The seedy side of Barca. I got in a sweat reading it. Nice 's-dropped rhymes'. (Wonder what the technical term is?) I like rhyme even though it's deeply unfashionable. Stuff Keats I say: let's all ride a rocking horse and call it Pegasus.
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I almost like this but find
I almost like this but find the rhymes difficult when they add the 's' on some of them - it seems to lose rhythm when that happens. I'm sure it's deliberate but it doesn't work for me - maybe others will disagree!
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