Daphne's Dafferdills
By Silver Spun Sand
Mon, 02 Mar 2009
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Consensus being, last night, she’d scored.
Full of the joys of spring she was,
as she proposed we each write a poem
on dafferdills. “I wandered lonely as a cloud …”
sprang to mind, except, Miss remarked,
William Wordsworth beat me to it.
Fair enough. So, some you win, some …
you lose. Who can blame a girl for trying?
And so, my gaze strayed toward the window.
“Don’t day-dream, Daphne,” she scolded.
Felt like saying, “Your loss not mine, Miss,”
if she was that short-sighted she couldn’t see
beyond the end of her nose. Amongst the grass
under the trees, there was a load of them.
Who needs poems, when beauty speaks for itself?
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So funny, especially since I
So funny, especially since I am about to use Wordsworth's 'The Daffodils' in a lesson on poetry essays!
hehe!
'Who needs poems, when beauty speaks for itself?' *cough*!
J x
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A lovely little snap shot
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
A lovely little snap shot Tina! Love the beginning - hilarious!
Magic xxx
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Consensus has that you too
Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Consensus has that you too have scored with this delightful poem, dear Tina.
You have the knack of a storyteller who engages the listener with wonderful and amusing tales.
Luigi xxx
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this is a wonderful read.
Permalink Submitted by Curse of 222 on
this is a wonderful read. loved the whimsical syntax, and the last line is deliciously ironic.
jason
jason
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this is a wonderful read.
Permalink Submitted by Curse of 222 on
this is a wonderful read. loved the whimsical syntax, and the last line is deliciously ironic.
jason
jason
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Hello Tina, 911 Reads. No
Hello Tina,
911 Reads. No wonder one has to make an appointment to comment on your poems!
Loved this one! But if teacher wouldn't allow 'I wandered lonely as a cloud'
What about I wandered about a bit...I bet you could turn that into something magically poetic! I'm beginning to think Wordsworth is feeding you the lines.
Wonderful!
Moya
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