Wordsworth's Secret
By MistakenMagic
Tue, 12 May 2009
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Grasmere, April 11th 2:30pm
The poem is waiting,
buried in the middle of the lake.
It mutters to itself and syllables
rise in bubbles.
I stand at the water’s edge,
my bare feet sinking into the sand
that holds them in stanzas.
Rhythm spreads from the poem in rings,
vibrating the water, kissing
my toes in iambic pentameter.
It congregates around the couplet of my ankles.
The sun throws a handful
of gold coins that sing like vowels
as they sink and fish
rise to the surface as words.
Their meaning is clear.
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I really like
Permalink Submitted by sarah wilson on
I really like this:-
"Kissing my toes in iambic pentameter"
Lovely
sarah
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some excellent phrasing and
some excellent phrasing and analogy. Nice work. Margot
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The cherry says it all,
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
The cherry says it all, Magic and I can only ditto what has already been said.
My favourite lines:-
The sun throws a handful
of gold coins that sing like vowels
as they sink and fish
rise to the surface as words."
Brilliant!
Tina xxx
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Really nice poem about
Permalink Submitted by Geoff Smith on
Really nice poem about poetting.
Love the place and date - little Wordsworthian touch!
Thanks.
JM.
Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.
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How right NWb is... on every
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
How right NWb is... on every count;-)
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i don't think i can add much
Permalink Submitted by Curse of 222 on
i don't think i can add much more to the comments before me. all of them are dead on. i'm starting to think your name is a misnomer...there is no mistake in your magic.
who uses the phrase "iambic pentameter," anyway?
jason
jason
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Can't say much more than
Can't say much more than what has been said before. This is bloody marvellous.
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beautiful Magic! It's all
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
beautiful Magic! It's all been said; clever clogs indeed. Class act. I am back after a fairly long absence and looking forward to catching up on all the guys work...looks like I picked the perfect place to start ;) Well done.
Chris XX
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magic -well delivered,
Permalink Submitted by littleditty on
magic -well delivered, cuplets and iambic images - super - keep fishing!
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Great natural rhythm/
Great natural rhythm/ movement..
Especially like the analogy of sun throwing coins/
Fish rising as words.
Clever indeed.
Salud.
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