Campari and Orange
By Silver Spun Sand
Fri, 12 Jun 2009
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Glass in hand
hammock
swinging –
glimpse a Painted Lady
chance to catch her breath
on willow-woven fence
wings outstretched
aquiver
at the whim
of the wind.
On the hill
cows for milking
in undulating never-ending line
lethargically
trundle.
Shade my eyes;
sight the field that lies
between two bristle pines;
all but shine
last year’s cones
golden-bronze
sun-dried.
Sink the dregs of
my Campari
as a day-weary sky
turns pink
then orange.
The distant bark
of a muntjac to its mate –
splices the silence
of it all
and I wish life
hadn’t left it this long
to find me.
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This is the second poem this
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
This is the second poem this week that I've read that has featured a 'painted lady' - strange the coincidences that life throws our way ;) Loved the imagery of the cows and the overall soothing atmosphere of this poem!
Magic xxx
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So atmospheric and so...oh,
So atmospheric and so...oh, just see it, am there, really got me, this one.
Think it would be even better if you put a stanza break after each full stop - they seem to fall quite naturally,
J x
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lovely evocative poem.
lovely evocative poem. Splicing the silence - great phrase. Margot
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HI! "SILVER SPUN" WHAT A
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
HI! "SILVER SPUN" WHAT A GORGEOUS NAME. I THINK OF FAIRIES IN GOSSAMA AND FLOATING RAINBOW WINGS. LOVED YOUR CAMPARI AND ORANGE. AS NEW DOING ALL THIS. THE IMAGERY YOURS, IS VERY GOOD STANDS OUT ALL THE THINGS IN IT. I ASSUME YOU WERE THERE. GOOD CHERRY SO QUICK. AMAZING HOW THEY WORK? ALL BEST. (oldie) JUST TRYING. I MSUT READ MORE of all. expressions great MAY I SAY. IN A HURRY MISTAKES. c
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Dear Tina, you amaze me. Not
Permalink Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Dear Tina, you amaze me. Not the fact that this poem is up there with all your others but the fact that you persevered over a couple of years to make it perfect. What dedication. In contrast I am too idle to give mine a second look and I know that this will horrify the purists.
Campari, eh? It may be that, and the Italian sun, that led to certain events to occur many years ago.
But I digress. I enjoyed the read.
Luigi xxx
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I have just found this and
Permalink Submitted by sarah wilson on
I have just found this and am delighted I did. Actually I think delightful is the perfect word for it. Congrats on another well deserved cherry.
Sarah x
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Hi Just chanced upon your
Permalink Submitted by livin-doll on
Hi
Just chanced upon your poem and the more I read it, the more I love it. It really does flow and takes the reader along with it..a bit like swinging to and fro in that hammock. I especially like the last few lines about life taking its sweet time. Lovely, a real treat!
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