Googling Earth
By Bradene
Sun, 24 May 2009
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I happened to Google Earth;
out of the blue
for some vague reason
I wondered
if the park bench was still there.
You know what, it was
The spot where you suggested…
and I said yes.
I was wearing that dress,
you know, the red one.
I blame that red dress
for the mess I’ve made of my life.
If it hadn’t have been for that
damn rag!
You wouldn’t have…
and I wouldn’t…
How I hate that ruddy dress!
And that tune!
Lady in Red!
You’d croon, every chance you got
and we’d dance.
How I hate that damn silly song!
And Spring bank holiday
It reminds me of a park bench,
a red dress, dark brown eyes,
fly away raven hair
and a green girl who said yes.
How I hate Spring Bank Holiday!
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Brilliant! I love this type
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Brilliant! I love this type of piece, that actually tells a mini story - This is what poetry should be about. The unfinished lines are inspirational and yet in no way ambiguous. Very, VERY enjoyable; wish you had it up before I threw away my Fivers on my efforts. ;) Good luck on this excellent entry.
Chris XX
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Great story=poem,
Great story=poem, particularly loved the opening two lines, which are completely superb:
'I happened to Google Earth;
out of the blue'
J x
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Congratulations on winning
Congratulations on winning with this superb poem! I am grinning away and I am sure you are still too!
J x
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Congratulations Val, well
Permalink Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Congratulations Val, well deserved. It was my favourite as soon as I read it (and I'm not just saying that), I didn't bother saying it anywhere else because I felt it somehow unfair to others. Have read it several times since you first put it up and it didn't lose anything in the repeats; keep smiling couldn't be happier for you ;)
Chris XX
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There were lots of good
Permalink Submitted by sarah wilson on
There were lots of good entries but this stood out for me too. Well done and congratulations:) sarah x
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Hi! Bradene congratulations
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
Hi! Bradene congratulations on winning Poem"Googling Earth." there is a google satellite car now dogy at times see all. My belated Mum loved red top you toe and Lady In Red song. We hated her in Red. Reds all the Rage! now. julie
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Congratulations on a winning
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Congratulations on a winning poem Val!
Magic xxx
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Hi Bradene, a really neat
Permalink Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Hi Bradene, a really neat poem. Amazing how such a collection of words can come together, almost off the cuff. Some of my best poems (in my estimation) were written that way. Richard LP
Richard L. Provencher
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