walk on the beach

By shoe

Sun, 06 Dec 2009

4 comments

Welcome unfurls at my feet
licks my toes enticingly
step into the unseen deep
ever promises to keep

Offer is withdrawn from me
leaves me stranded in this scene
up on high there comes a scream
bitter solace on the wing

Permalink Submitted by kheldar on Sun, 2009-12-06 11:54

Very poignant and a very clever take on the sea, I love it

Permalink Submitted by shoe on Sun, 2009-12-06 17:05

Kheldar, I'm glad you like it, thank you so much for lovely comment, I tried to keep to strict structure with this one, :-)

Permalink Submitted by ScoZen on Mon, 2011-01-17 20:17

Shoe, hello there. Poignant tale This reminds me of a young girl (a day tripper) who sadly drowned on the beach near where I live. Regards

ScoZen

Permalink Submitted by shoe on Tue, 2011-01-18 13:32

Hi ScoZen, what a sad story, was it accidental? thanks for dropping in.