Clean Slate

By MistakenMagic

Tue, 19 Jan 2010
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12 comments
 

It was New Year’s Day.
The field of snow fell at my
feet like a blank page.

I embraced the white silence;
the promise of a clean slate.

Certificate U
Poem
Conversation With My Thirteen-Year-Old Self
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Nathan! I know it's short but I like the challenge that a Tanka presents - having to cram so much into five lines ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by shoe on
you did get a lot into this little tanka, but it is far from crammed, more perfectly formed,

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you, Shirley! Glad you liked this one ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
In these few cleverly constructed lines, Magic, you have managed to capture the essence of a new year and all the sentiments we feel. Very well done;-) Tina xxx

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you, Tina! I just hope I do some good things with this clean slate of mine ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
I agree with Nathan. This is beautiful. I really enjoy your shorter poems because you express so much in them! I'm sure the year ahead will be great for you :-) Beeme xx

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Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Cheers Beeme! I hope it will be great for you too ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou! :-)

k.

Submitted by Dynamaso on
The challenge with this form is to give the reader as much as you can with as little as possible, something you have more than capably achieved.

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Dynamaso ;) Glad you think so! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Perfect, both for the reader and (I suspect) yourself. I sense a calm determination in this wonderful little piece. Well done. Chris XXXX

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'Calm determination' - couldn't have put it better myself, Chris ;) Thank you! Magic xxx