States Of My Mind (sometimes)

Cherry

By Dynamaso

Fri, 29 Jan 2010
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8 comments
 

Madness is lip-synching
to an unwritten song;
Stupidity is the other
trying to sing along.

Crazy is dancing
to a completely different tune;
Delirious is wondering
what happened to the moon.

Idleness is slouching
paying nothing any mind.
Boredom is pacing up and down
whining about the daily grind;

Lust is playing hard to get
while flirting ceaselessly
and at the end, there you are,
Patience, waiting for me.

Certificate U
Poem
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
"Crazy is dancing to a completely different tune; Delirious is wondering what happened to the moon." This has to be my favourite stanza in this very cleverly written poem. Like it, a lot. Tina

 

Submitted by kheldar on
Would have to agree with Tina, this is very indeed well and cleverly written, I would have to disagree with Tina and say the first stanza is definitely my favourite.

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Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
OK then, so that's my favourite as well;-)

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Such wonderful personification, Dynamaso! My favourite stanza: 'Idleness is slouching paying nothing any mind. Boredom is pacing up and down whining about the daily grind;' Brilliant ending too. Well done on a well-deserved cherry ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Thank you for your kind comment, Tina. This is another old one I revamped and tidied up. I am happy with the result and pleased you like it too. Kheldar, thank you also for your comment. I'm glad it appealed to you enough for you to pick a favourite stanza. I suppose if I had to pick, my favourite stanza is the last one. Magic, thanks to you as well. It really is how my mind feels some days - all over the place. But I wouldn't change it for anything. Thanks to the cherry-giver too. What a lovely Saturday morning surprise.

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
SundaysChild, thanks very much for your sweet comment. I've been a little inactive of late but hope to pick up the pace again.

 

Submitted by maggyvaneijk on
this is beautiful, the first stanza is my favourite. I love how can relate to every line!

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Maggy, thanks for reading. Glad you liked and related :)