The Mirror

By shoe

Sat, 06 Mar 2010
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13 comments
 

These new strands of silver are a legacy
along with the concerned look around the eyes,
she must have looked like this,

-That time I woke-
trying to tease out the thorn in my hand,
and when I had that fever, her fingers
stroking back my home cut fringe.

Two memories of the touch of her,
I keep separate from the stiff embraces,
the reaching across, touching glass.

Certificate U
Poem
They don't mean to, but they do
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
This is beautiful, Shirley - such tender and delicate images. Just spotted a typo - 'seperate' should be 'separate' ;) I really like this one, well done! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
echoing Magic - beautiful and simple poem Shoe!

 

Submitted by Beeme on
I agree with the above :) Beautiful, sincere, heart-warming. Beeme xx

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Submitted by shoe on
Oops, thanks Magic, corrected now, pleased you liked,:~}

 

Submitted by shoe on
Thanks IPF and Beeme, for reading and your encouraging words,:~}

 

Submitted by kheldar on
I can say no different to what has already been said, yet again yoy imbue a few simple worlds with a whole heap of emotion. David xx P.S. if anyone asks, tell 'em the "silver streaks" are veeery expensive highlights

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Submitted by shoe on
Could start a new trend! lol. in truth I am much too vain to let them show, but roots didn't have quite the same poetic ring to it,:~D

 

Submitted by jennifer on
Some great imagery, J x

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Just wonderful, Shirley. It has all been said;-) T x

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
I'm secretly proud of my odd bits of grey, although I do attempt to hide them away, my mamas hair has darkened instead! xx K

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by shoe on
Thank you J, Tina and Nathan, I'm particularly pleased you liked this one, it is close to me. Kahdai, grey is a sign of wisdom, yes? :~}

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Wisdom, age or stress, more like 'experience of life' I think. :)

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Firebird on
Such a lovely poem Shirley x:)