Sabra Hime & Smog (I.P.)

By Kahdai

Thu, 22 Apr 2010
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The hunger of Smog,
only likely to grow,
the kings dilemma
and heartbrakes
for lottery
seeming a favourite
luck was taking no bribes.

The many who were led out
a candle lit in the window
for the loved ones spirit
sent out to the flag post.

For Sabra, hime of theirs
all the castle-town cries,
a long scarlet silk ribbon
one to the flag post ties.

Dust cloud ride towards
in the red desert sands,
a chesnut & white horse,
an empty white sheild.

The metal warrior,
his silver sword,
the green dragon blood,
a red cross makes his crest.

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Submitted by Highhat on
St. George and the dragon? Lots of lovely words

Submitted by Highhat on
I didn't see the inspiration point of the week and I guessed rightly. Well done Kahdai ;-)

Submitted by shoe on
One of the fastest I.P's I have seen, an excellent take on it, I love the language you have used.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Sorry to be so ignorant but what does I.P. stand for? :/ pia

Submitted by Kahdai on
Inspiration point Highhat :) you alredy said it up there! Can I return-ask what is pia? Thank-you both for commenting! Yes shoe, I was eager to try it, I ent english or christian, however always liked this story & the sheild changing at the end, it became part of my art exam years ago because of this painting: http://www.artmagick.com/pictures/picture.aspx?id=6037&name=the-princess... . Had to be pre-raphaelite, I see I spelt the name sabre, like a sword, I oughts correct meself!

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Kahdai on
Transcription, that's what I was meant to do, I hated art as a lesson, still can't stop myself though, fail or not, I would always be an artist. I also swapped over some lines.

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Highhat on
thanks Kahdai/ Inspiration Point of course. If you have an IP address it is something other than. Pia is my name / like Julie or Tina or Rachel or John only it is a female name. Simply. something has happened to my keyboard must fix it/ there should be a smile here.xx pia

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'Dust cloud ride towards in the red desert sands, a chesnut & white horse, an empty white sheild.' - lovely images in these lines, Kahdai! Great take on this week's IP ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
Highhat, I don't know if it normal to put (I.P.) next to IP inspired poems, I saw it done & figured (dare not say assumed) that was what others was doing. :) Your name, pia! Sorry I have never heard it before & it being all small letters! I like unusual names though, do you have a special meaning or names-sake? Thanks Magic dear, so glad you like! Thankyou both for read & commenting! xxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "