The Big C

Poem of the week

By InspiredWriter

Tue, 25 May 2010
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It's like that feeling you get
When you stand at the top of a cliff,
Looking down.
You push your toes right to the edge
Just enough that you can bend right over without falling
But just enough that your heart starts to dance rampantly.
It's exhilarating,
Highly recommended.
It comes with a sensation of absolute power;
You are in control of your life
Because one more step could be the end of everything and it's exciting.
Yet, you still consider
What if?
What if that tiny pebble were to fall,
And your foot slipped?
What if this patch of grass was particularly dewy,
And your cheap Primark shoes couldn't handle it?
It's that feeling.
When the fear starts to creep in
And you realise how close you'd come to death
So close...
That's what it feels like.
But trying to tell your family, your friends
Thats when you jump off the cliff.

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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I've been there. Jumping with them. Tina

 

Submitted by WillSimpson on
I like this, good job, just wondering if you have read my short Jolly Adventure, its written along similar lines.

Until we feel our thoughts our thinking remains unfelt

Submitted by Margharita on
Mmm. Facing something a bit similar at the moment. Found this thought provoking and helpful. Thanks.

Submitted by InspiredWriter on
Thats alright Margharita, I'm just very apologetic that you are having to experience something like this. Same goes for Silver Spun Sand, its a horrible thing to have to experience. But thankyou so much for the cherry and the positive comments(: that hard work is all worth it for that little fruit (: InspiredWriterx

Noah

Submitted by Anna Marie on
Very thought provoking and I know this feeling. You captured it perfectly. I'll be there for the next few months...right on the edge. Excellent

 

Submitted by InspiredWriter on
Wow thankyou (: I'm just so shocked at the amount of people going through something like this, it's terrible but I sincerely hope that it works out for you (: InspiredWriterx

Noah

Submitted by luigi_pagano on
Congratulations on your poem being nominated 'Poem of the week'. Very well done.

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you for such a thought provoking and honest poem. I have been there too. Hopefully you'll never have to get there again. :) Well done for making poem of the week- truly deserving. Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by InspiredWriter on
Wow, I'm so grateful for the poem of the week nomination, thank so so so much (: Thankyou Beeme for the lovely comment, I havent come into contact directly with cancer but my great grandmother unfortunately died of the illness and she was incredibly brave about it and she was truly inspiring, so people like that need to be recognised and... Commended, in a way because telling people about it (especially family) is an incredibly difficult thing to do. I'm just so glad it's touched people in the way it has. THANKYOU (: InspiredWriterx

Noah

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Inspired Writer Yes,as our Editor t.Cook AbcTales says Read this poem I have. 1st well done on poem,big C.Nominated of the week. my belated dad.it is alway's hard to be able to put or explain some can't yep Ive experienced many things to.But different world now,share and to care,and all the things happening,but a cup of tea and chat best remedy.Well done on nomination of the week,and cherry! may care to read mine, "The Mangled Mess of Some Of Life's Experiences".let me know comments.I meet so many now daily,long for a smile and someone told me,and talk,or are ill.Or what doing creative things maybe.Once my belated lady friend felt that way by trains,ike a magnet draws things,pressures of life,always someone worse off. like talk of or ill.Be a good listener.Mainly it's What courses it.So many things.To understand is to be understood.To interact is to find out.Lucky if right partner wife,husband etc;can do so.Courses of life.I think and have also experienced such a criticising world now, in most things,and families. Word well done,that's nice,how are you,thankyou,sometimes goes a long way. little children,so grown up before playing,and words. We say,so many wrong things in attitudes to-day, but everyone has a bit of love,or og back and re-turn that love,is so many thinking and doing way,may have been last time with that parent's love Big c.whatever I know.terrifically hard,and exhausting,but every bit worthwhile.I know. bless you julie xx

Submitted by Verity Valentine on
Primark shoes kind of kills the imagery. Lol, im kidding... it's incredible, good metaphor! Sabzwin X

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Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
It's tough to put the feelings into words but you managed it with aplomb. Well done. Chris :)

Submitted by InspiredWriter on
Thankyou very much Chris (: InspiredWriterx

Noah