Brass Frottage

By littleditty

Mon, 09 Aug 2010

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13 comments

I, wrapped around your spoon,
Honeyed and warm, sheet hot
Milk running down your form.
Don’t take the I from a poem
Of liquid gold, the amberling glow
Of touches, fingertip to toe.
It isn’t me in the spotlight,
Just in heat – from Mercury
Rising, from silvery shadows
Dancing the age it takes to trace
The top brass bronze of you.

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http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/

Permalink Submitted by littleditty on Mon, 2010-08-09 22:40

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Frottage_(surrealist_technique)

Really beautiful poem, ld!

Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on Mon, 2010-08-09 23:14

Really beautiful poem, ld! Your imagery is just superb and wonderfully compact. Especially loved: 'Don’t take the I from a poem Of liquid gold, the amberling glow Of touches, fingertip to toe.' Magic xxx

hi magical one - i'm half

Permalink Submitted by littleditty on Mon, 2010-08-09 23:51

hi magical one - i'm half way through writing a comment on your last poem liking your gold and yellow imagery! Thank you xx

Everything Magic said - she

Permalink Submitted by jennifer on Tue, 2010-08-10 08:07

Everything Magic said - she literally took the words right out of my mouth! Beautiful, J x

hey J -long time no see

Permalink Submitted by littleditty on Tue, 2010-08-17 00:38

hey J -long time no see around these parts - want to spend more time reading here -will investigate your pages -thanks for commenting x

Hi Littleditty, Just wanted

Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on Tue, 2010-08-10 09:25

Hi Littleditty, Just wanted to say, beautiful words. Congratulations on the cherry. Jenny.

Thanks Jenny, glad you liked

Permalink Submitted by littleditty on Tue, 2010-08-17 00:40

Thanks Jenny, glad you liked x

Wow - this took my breath

Permalink Submitted by Canary Islander on Tue, 2010-08-10 09:31

Wow - this took my breath away. So much, in so few words... :-)

Hi there, ld;-) Still on

Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on Tue, 2010-08-10 12:53

Hi there, ld;-) Still on top-form...and some. Tina;-)xx

short and sweet! Yes so much

Permalink Submitted by Highhat on Tue, 2010-08-10 13:39

short and sweet! Yes so much in a few words;) pia->

Like everyone else said -

Permalink Submitted by Kit_Caless on Tue, 2010-08-10 13:46

Like everyone else said - great imagery. I love the last two lines. Technical point: Am I wrong in thinking there should be some sort of punctuation after 'your form'? The sentences don't seem to fit as one? Kit

Lovely delicate use of

Permalink Submitted by shoe on Tue, 2010-08-10 16:51

Lovely delicate use of words, just beautiful.

nathan, shoe, kit, pia,

Permalink Submitted by littleditty on Tue, 2010-08-17 00:34

nathan, shoe, kit, pia, tina, and canary -thanks all for reading and commenting, glad you like- and Kit, cheers for pointing out a lost full stop, where did it go? will fix :)