Because of you
By _elle_
Fri, 14 Jan 2011
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It is a silence.
It is a grey-ness.
In between the noise of the finale
And the awaited epilogue.
In between the great black;
all comsuming grief
And the untouched white, the snow.
Virtue and purity.
Waiting for the drop of blood
to touch it.
Waiting for your words to
break the silence.
I hang in the silence and grey,
Waiting for you; my drop of blood.
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In between the noise of the
In between the noise of the finale
And the awaited epilogue. Great line.
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Wow lynze this is really
Wow lynze this is really great, the snow waiting for drop of blood! I think it must be really emotional too, to write? Actually made me think of this, something like 'Between idea and reality, the motion and the act, falls the shadow.' from a poem 'hollow man' or somthin
... anyway this is better ;) K xx
"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "
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The pacing is very good -
The pacing is very good - the way you capture a moment and the silence between things.
Rob
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Great poem. Enjoyed. Tina
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Great poem. Enjoyed.
Tina
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Beautiful and subtle.
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Beautiful and subtle.
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